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genisis 12-11-03 06:35 PM

made up jail cell
 
still pretty new at all this so CONSTRUCTIVE critizizm is much appreciated, lemme know how you feel it or what it needs...





runnin solo, feelin alone in this life of mine
it aint the same for the rest and im tired of tryin
sick with grief, green leaf,and the worlds got me crazy
hopin for peace ,and some sleep, only this lonliness can phase me
in the dark i stay waitin, words blantant, lord come get me
these people hatin,makin statements,confusing thoughs unsteady
battlin my own,confused by gettin stoned,and keep it to myself
no calls on my phone,so cold and so alone,stuck waiting on a shelf
lookin or escape,these haters are so fake,theyre makin up my hell
feelin this mental rape, pondering my fate, in a made up jail cell

skrawni ASK RRD 12-13-03 12:12 PM

NICE...
VERY NICE...
NICE MAN...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Gunna XL 12-14-03 01:40 PM

nice but i noticed that there are just some useless words thorwn in there which should be taken out


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