NUCLEAR CONCEPTS: The Rebelion PT. 3- KAZE
 

replied to: ROBO, RULE, AND WORD~P.

(THIS IS DONE BACK IN THE PRESENT TIME OF PART 1, 2099)

THIS IS DONE THROUGH THE EYES OF KURIO KAZE.

kaze stands in the bar with a silent crowd
the roar of years past echoes so loud
that he nearly drowns in sea of reminicing
flahes of battle rapping, time's that he's been missing
he recollets in 2060 hvs had his back
when they staged the coup forming a two-prong attack
hvs to shut the power down, kaze to rush security
but when kaze got there, electric defenses were sill armed and ready
"Where HVS at?" he though as laser blasts killed comrades
so Kaze retreated with only a fourth of what he had
still alive, his eyes took in the extermination of friends
and decided once again "Fancy C has to end"
so he went to Japan and began digging through archives
fortunately his knowledge of japanese still survived
when he found a text hundreds of years old
still preserved because it was sealed in gold
boldy, he cracked the case and leafed through the pages
a light streamed out and it felt like his bones were blazing
afterwards he looked into the mirror, it was amazing
his youth was restored but he was better than ever before
a mere flick of the wrist went right through an iron door
his agility increased, his mc fluidity
on another level than any previous mc
he could hide words on the wind and battle rap from a mile off
so opponents would be dead before they could even cough
using his newfound powers he travelled to new york and raided one of c's compounds
he tore the place apart and at the end he finally found
a lock box stocked full of old mc chains
as he began leafing through them he recognized the old names
no limit, cash money, death row, aftermath, and then
he realized that each of these was an appropriate shuriken
the diamond edges would cut c's troops in half
plus he couldn't resist killing with an ironic attack from the past
after that he began touring the club scene
where he was now faced with ending c's regime
all this thought within the blink of an eye
as he faced remix, saw the mic in his hand, and smiled...

UPPIN^^^

uppin.
cmon people dont sleep on this.

GODDAMN QUIT SLEEPIN ON THIS MUTHAPUCKAS.
SHIT ALL YOU GOTTA DO IS SAY WHAT YOU THOUGHT ABOUT IT.
IS THAT REALY THAT HARD, FUCK.

lol i liked it - alot actually, all ur Rebelion shit is tight..
pz

Rebellion is Kinda Played in my view
But you handled it nicely.. just work
on it and everything

nice imagry and concept, i aint read a rhyme set in the future.
could structure, nice wodplay and sounded like it could be an audio piece.
keep that shit up.

hit my rhyme
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98014

cheers

yeah quite liked this drop...liked the concept, even if it was a bit played...ya still executed it ok...so...yeah not bad man...liking it....pZ...keep reppin....

Yeah i agree this was a pretty good drop here....structure in this was pretty good overall i thought.....flow in this was good, stayed on pretty well through out it as i read through it...this made a good read...overall a good piece....keep at it.

TY FOR THE FEEDBACK ON THIS.
SEE IT ANT THAT HARD TO REPLY NOW IS IT PEOPLE SO QUIT SLEEPING.

good work and i like how u started out on a great verse

great work mayn...your flow was on point i thought very well done. you had some good lines for a very used topic...but you stayed on point and had a good story line good job return the favour

Hit this battle up with an honest vote
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=98612

real good story telling i felt the hwole story telling good deptth in the content good rhyme scheme could use a little more internals or multis but overall it was a real good read

thx for the feedback my niggas.
keep it comin.
part 4 will be out tommorow.
peace.

this piece was raw... flow was coo so was vocab
structure was ight
peep my new open