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Slik Shadow 12-13-03 08:54 PM

Religious Sentiment (Deep)
 
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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS: My Love Song
{.NC.} False Hope ft/Edicus
Shook Ones (LoCo Diss)


Religious Sentiment

Spikes were pushed into the planks,legs and arms between them
Crimson flowed from fingers and toes, pleasing the non believers
They all cheered for his bleeding, while that cross held him there
Still felt he cared for the people, but could he really quell despair?
He seldom gave any doubt, til he saw lack of faith from the crowd
he prayed for their souls, gave a final gasp, aimed for the clouds

The last second of life lasts forever, and Christ’s wasn’t different
He thought of the future’s grace, and the life that they’d live in

“Beings from high in the heavens will be reborn on the Earth
People will love each other, and become adored from their birth
I've seen the greedy, evil, mean, but now God's cured the disease
The burning hell’ll learn real well that they should have believed
They couldn’t’ve dreamed of a better place or a more better life
And Thanks to God’s sacrifice, they will all be able to get it right

All races will be as one, with none feeling supreme to another
Dads’ll be ther for their sons, Kids won’t be mean to their mothers
People will lean on their brothers and their families for guidance
Ignoring violence, giving children no reason to close their eyelids
Future grooms and brides’ll live their relationships to the death
Their primal urges put to the test, staying virgins till they are wed
And no man will escape his bed for the bed of any other girl
The lady won’t give away her gift doing sins of the underworld
The body will be a temple, and they will all worship its parts
They won’t contaminate their person, because it, in itself, is art

Property won’t tear them apart They’ll be happy with their possessions.
Their lucky to have their health, so why'd battles ever be questioned
Death will never be a message, They’ll solve problems with voices
No swords or arrows to threaten, so hearts can follow their choices
All souls will get anointed, and the destitute will get helped
For the less fortunate should never be left to fend for themselves

A nicer world, These people will find out. These guys will learn
In two thousand years, the Earth will be perfect when I return"

A smile came to Christ’s hanging head, but alas, the moment had passed
He condoned the past, and freed it all with the hope in his gasp

“Forgive them...they don't know what they do.”

....But how long can it last?

Gunna XL 12-13-03 08:58 PM

hmmmmmmmm interesting good approach.

Menik 12-13-03 09:02 PM

^ should make your feedbacks a little more detailed than that..

But this was a alright piece here i thought...your structure seemed pretty good through out this.....vocab in this was alright, could be up'd a bit though i think...flow was ok in this, kinda got off at a few spots but it stayed on mostly..but keep at it.

ill Explicit 12-13-03 09:18 PM

damn that was real ill the depth of the content was superior to most anything ive read at this site the flow suffered in areas but not enough to take anything away from the strengths of the verse i was definately feelin this

Sick*Wit*It 12-14-03 03:19 PM

it was hot i thought str8 fire from beginin 2 end


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