Ever Since...
 

dont expect anything great here.. im just getting some stuff off my chest..



Ever Since...She left me it appears as if this life is hopeless
Ever Since...I dont live for myself, but for past moments
Ever Since...Life has increased the tempo of this ratrace
Ever Since...I havent attempted to be in a womans embrace
Ever Since...I feel as if I have noting more to possibly lose
Ever Since...I never said what I felt, "Geraldine, I Love You"
Ever Since...I was expelled I seem to be backtracking
Ever Since...I found a new way to expand: backpacking
Ever Since...Ive failed my Father, and family as a whole
Ever Since...I ignored the predictions my Father foretold
Ever Since...I find im blaming others for my mistakes
Ever Since...Ive tried to find new ways to mask the pain
Ever Since...I turned into a man at 13, ive been on my own
Ever Since...I chose my own path..on the wrong side of the road
Ever Since...I found that im on the lesser with teams stacked
Ever Since...I turned my back on God hes been kickin my ass
Ever Since...The only emotion givin by my Mother was scorn
Ever Since...Is the story of my life..Ever Since I was born


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98644

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97001

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98484

This felt more like a poem 2 me. i kinda lost interest when u said dont expect anything great, u should never start off wit that in my opinion, u might have dickriders who woulda gave it 5 mics. as a poem i thought this was very good, i just didnt get the feelin of a rap from it. keep spittin.

PS- critique mines

lol you are so right. *posts this in the poetry section* Maven, go ahead and close this brother.

yeah i agree this was poetic.....not really my sort of thing...but i hope you got what you wanted off ya chest...lol.....pZ man

pretty good drop....very poetic (like everyone else is saying)

good to get some of that stuff off ya chest...emotional piece

7/10

not bad drop

return the favour and hit up my open mics in my sig...thanks alot

it was a good poem