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I spit a lines wit a couple or a few verbs
Skribbz is a vegiterian so i'm devouring all the herbs Rip emcee's and bounce to the next like bad checks Ya'll know i'm the shit cuz I party in toilet bowls My games like squad cars cuz i'm coppin all the hoes They call me Mister Rogers cuz I'm jus too nice My flows hott like volcanic eruptions it'll melt ya ice Skribbz lines are like fallin of a bike so you can't handle-my-bars Don't claim to be gangster but I packs more heat than heaters in the trunks of cars Got madd of hoe's on my dick like havin sex in a garden Rhyme's are ubsurd. . . Cuz i'm droppin hotter shit than over heated terds. . . played topic I know, but I edited a verse I posted awhile ago.. twas' incredibly w.a.c.k so I re wrote it.. btw my structure's fixed :) |
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mainly... just make sure your lines rhyme...I seen a few and
I was like... wtf... wheres the rhyme... not too bad though... your structure still needs a lil work... but you had some nice wordplay in there... just keep elevatin dawg... ~AshY~ |
There was only like one time that I didn't rhyme.. lol
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Feedback would be niice..
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YOU GOT POTENTIAL AND YOU NOT GARABAGE JUST FIND YOUR STYLE AND DELIVERY
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you got the structure now just fix your vocab
stay up |
decent drop nothing really facinating about the piece...Pretty much a typical hype verse at a low form...
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Thx for the feedback ya'll..
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Ya'll know i'm the shit cuz I party in toilet bowls
^ewwwwwwwww you came too basic but you have potential to be a decent battler you had sum ok wordplay keep dropp'n |
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