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I spit a lines wit a couple or a few verbs
Skribbz is a vegiterian so i'm devouring all the herbs
Rip emcee's and bounce to the next like bad checks
Ya'll know i'm the shit cuz I party in toilet bowls
My games like squad cars cuz i'm coppin all the hoes
They call me Mister Rogers cuz I'm jus too nice
My flows hott like volcanic eruptions it'll melt ya ice
Skribbz lines are like fallin of a bike so you can't handle-my-bars
Don't claim to be gangster but I packs more heat than heaters in the trunks of cars
Got madd of hoe's on my dick like havin sex in a garden
Rhyme's are ubsurd. . . Cuz i'm droppin hotter shit than over heated terds. . .

played topic I know, but I edited a verse I posted awhile ago.. twas' incredibly w.a.c.k so I re wrote it.. btw my structure's fixed :)

I replied to. . .


Kastaway - Return

Deva - The Best Concepts

Slik Shadow - Untitled 2

mainly... just make sure your lines rhyme...I seen a few and
I was like... wtf... wheres the rhyme... not too bad though...
your structure still needs a lil work... but you had some nice
wordplay in there... just keep elevatin dawg...
~AshY~

There was only like one time that I didn't rhyme.. lol

Feedback would be niice..

YOU GOT POTENTIAL AND YOU NOT GARABAGE JUST FIND YOUR STYLE AND DELIVERY

you got the structure now just fix your vocab
stay up

decent drop nothing really facinating about the piece...Pretty much a typical hype verse at a low form...

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Thx for the feedback ya'll..

Ya'll know i'm the shit cuz I party in toilet bowls
^ewwwwwwwww

you came too basic
but you have potential to be a decent battler
you had sum ok wordplay
keep dropp'n