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deacon 12-15-03 07:02 PM

Rapbattles owns you!!!!!
 
Shamed by hysteria as I read through these pages..
I’d embark past a million who call themselves sages.
You write nice “why thanks” you can keep my keyboard.
This screen write you thinks nice is held low and floored..
A bases for new faces I’ve never even seen before.
We create an innate data that we breathe to dream more…
Its pointless to point the fingers when theres no fingers to be seen..
Fighting on who’s better underneath a shinny monitor screening
I palpitate my last breaths reading of pages from a mirrored ceiling.
Dictate my excellence so my words can distract relevant feelings.
Expressed through romantic text patterns for useless comments.
You compromise your self-worth for a value that is pointless.


Over a couple days this has become more evident than ever....i quickly put togther a short piece which i feel expresses my feelings towards it perfectly....read and enjoy..

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...1144#post991144

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...1160#post991160

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...1182#post991182

LoCo 12-15-03 07:05 PM

dope as fuck, flow,vocab - hot man

Lewd 12-15-03 07:06 PM

i liked it,its a topic not usually done.and the flow and vocab was good. could have been longer but its obvious that u just did it quick to get a point out.good job.

do me a favour and vote on this battle cuz its been to long.


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97818

deacon 12-15-03 07:15 PM

thanks for replies....really this is toward a few people inparticular...they know who they are....like it matters though.. thanks

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MeNTiLL 12-15-03 07:18 PM

Ha ... This was pretty dope deac ... When I read the title I thought it was gonna be a reg. diss ... But U had some nice shit in here ... Keep doin' ur thing man ... Peace

rule 12-15-03 07:21 PM

good piece mayn, you had some good rhymes kinda short but well worth the read, your vocab was good and you had a nice way of putting your thoughts across well done

Peep my weathers an art if you got time lates man

deacon 12-15-03 07:26 PM

will do tomorrow mayne im getting sick.....and leavin work now
thanks for the reply much love to all...

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Menik 12-15-03 07:31 PM

Yeah i agree this was a good piece here i thought.....made a good read....flow in this was real nice as i read through it, it stayed on point through the whole thing....vocab was good in this....overall a good piece here.

Walter Wall 12-15-03 11:09 PM

I was feelin this piece
but it made me realize how pointless this response was, lol
but seriously, dope piece
flow and vocab were on point
good consistancy and content
keep dropp'n

Born To Kill 12-16-03 09:39 AM

Very cool way of saying "Rapbattles isn't life, get your head outta your ass."

I appreciate the message.

It's one I've always tried to follow.

Good vocab, short and direct message.

Flowed just right.

8/10

deacon 12-16-03 11:36 AM

thanks alot for the feed back much appreciated...

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