Gangsta One vs -->FreeBasE<--
 

10 lines/ 5 bars

blindspit, drop verses w/i 30min

house rules
no hate or unexplained votes

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One


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A'ight, check check checkin in...haha......................................... ................................................

Check it...

Tryin' a new structure...

Yo, Jan 1st, gave life ta this queer/ But he ain' tha betta part of tha New Year*//

Nigga, ya ryhmez are festive/ I swallow em whole witout chewin, like they digestive//

Men spring this fuckaz erection/ Ya record 0-1 is a horrible firs' impression//

Ya like tha penis long like a salamander/ Ima destroy ya shi', like I was "Master and Commander"//

Ya, I guess 'n repeat** ya location/ Ya a poor-ass citizen, dyin' from starvation//

Ya, you Raw 'n Uncut***/ 'Cause ya boyfrien' hasn' punctured ya ass, but ya futa job is a buttslut//

If ya though' ya could beat me, ya heart decieved/ A merk from me, is a gift well recieved****//

Ima spray ya wit "hurb"-icide/ Defeat you, spit on you, 'n watch ya commit suicide...//

*He was born on January 1st
**His location says Guess 'n Repeat
***Look at his Sig
****It's an honor ta recieve a merkin' from me


Waitin on u dawg...

I Know U Gettin Snow Up N Canada But Dont Let Ya Brain Freeze-
Cuz Im Spittin Heat W/breeze, While U Killin Yo'Self On Skis- prof.
Wigga Pleaze Get Linkin Park Cuz N This Part Im Gettin Dark-
U'll B A Rappin Quadraped, Vocab Rippin Ya Limbs Apart-
Shit This Verbal Laundering, Checkmate, U just a Pawn, G-
I Twist Ya Heart, Like Wet Towels, U Get Sent To The Laundry-*
Yer a 50/50 guy, Not 50 Cent, But You Do Like "Many Men"-
Break da Henny Jab U in Yo Skinny Chin, U Just A Citi-Zen-
Abeyin My Law U Got 'Dick-N-Da-Jaw Awe', Call Me Twelve-
For Ya Record N 4 The Time Taken To Wreck Ya Wit Shells-

Aight Dawg

*Mob term, for gettin murked

Hmm...
Much elevation room for both of you..
Work on using more metas and clever hard hitting punches
Sex Lines are played-- Never use those..
Never use "s //s or any other symbol

Freebase took this one with better flow and harder hitting punches

Although it was close

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98955

^ Use structure similar to that.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98955

A'ight thx fo honesty, UPPIN(1).......................................... .................................................. ................

like token said... too many sex jokes.... but one was funny with tha impression shit....
i liked frees laundry punch but ... im gonna hve to go with gangsta one...more consistant

vote-gangsta one....

hit this up plz....i took tha time...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98986

Vote - freebase
 

I think both verses had some nice punches, i wasn't really feeling Gangsta Ones personals though!! I'd have to give this too Freebase because he was more consistant and had the better punches!! Both flows were a bit choppy so i'd say that was a tie here!!

Keep elevating!!

K.O.S

A'ight, thx fo ya honesty, UPPIN(2) This shi' bein slept on................................................ .................................................. .....

Fuckin' bein SLEPT ON! UPPIN(3)^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

I don' fuckin' believe this...FUCIN' UPPIN(4)^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

uppin for honest votes
1st

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Wat he said...........UPPIN(Final)^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^

i'm a break it down...
flow...i didn't like the new structure kinda fucked your flow so i give it to freebase..no hate..
punches..you both had em freebases didn't really...rhyme...i onno i gonna give this one to gangsta..one..
personals...goes to gangsta i don't think freebase had any..call me crazy...
opener...goes to freebase...
closer......gangsta one .....no hate
one love i'll poll it if its still open when i get a 100 my vote gangsta.,.

Honest Opinion

Punchlines - none
Wordplay - none
structure - Freebase
flow - Freebase
rhyme scheme - Gangsta 1ne
personals - Gangsta 1ne
opener - Gangsta 1ne
closer - Gangsta 1ne
creativity - Gangsta 1ne

overall - Gangsta 1ne

yes...gangsta you still need to work on the flow of things, your gettin there..you was still pritty aiight and dominated your opponent, but lesson-be-learned..the flow needs work a little more..good props to both emcees.