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kautious vs canuck
6-8 lines
no hate votes/ biting or recycelying simple rules check in and drop when you can |
^ thats not what we agreed on ^
but now that you pre-wrote, I'll stillserve your ass.......................................... |
yo don't mean to freepost, but yall better read the new rules... 10 line minimum.
pz... and good luck |
He said it 10 line minimum. Due Whenever.......................................... .................................................. ...................................
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yea aight 10 line
due asap im keying it up now .................................................. ............. .................................................. .............. |
Kautious with a 'K', damn I guess this kids krazy//(1)
but I'm nautious cuz thats played, now he think's he's gon' faze me//(2) How you change'n the rules, so it will benifit your style?//(3) but I'm still hang'n them fools, so admit it, you's in denial//(4) so as you choke on this shit, cuz you can barley even rap//(5) why don't you smoke on this dick, and kiss on my hairy ass?//(6) sorry, jus look'n for laughs cuz I can't take you serious//(7) but you still shook'n shit in those pants, ya moms gonna be furious//(8) I hate to end it so soon, when I was just get'n started//(9) but I ain't gon'elevate battle'n you, cuz your just too retarded//(10) sorry that was like a record for me........5minutes 43seconds |
MY verse
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Description of a killing, my verse prescribes another death... thinking of fatal ways that i could just "steal away your breath" a method where u "get blow(n)" away like inhaling lines of crystal meth... -verse- Why do u north idiots surround me, another canadian rapper to dismantel... you'll get "tuned" to have "flashbacks" like i was changing the channel...:shoot: RB my “home” Page, plz don’t band me for this “domestic disturbance” "my offense"... I get tense to be intense that’s why this kid’s getting burned like Miss.Cleos incense... RB my “home” Page, plz don’t band me for this “domestic disturbance” in my offense... I get tense to be intense that’s why this kid’s getting burned like Miss.Cleos incense... Look Princess if your verse is hot then I must be seeing it as pretense... Don’t give your rhymes “thought”; giving so much “brain” you probably got no sense... explanations: "tuned" means fixed beat up. fucked the link: was a canadian thinking he was the best one on the site y'all should get the rest i dunno if i threw a extra line in their and if i did then you can to also the way i did the verse might hurt the structure, but any way drop it |
what the fuck, why did it repeat it.s self ... lmao i must of put the line in their 2wice,,
i gotta fix dat!!!!! |
MY verse
-intro-
Description of a killing, my verse prescribes another death... thinking of fatal ways that i could just "steal away your breath" a method where u "get blow(n)" away like inhaling lines of crystal meth... -verse- Why do u north idiots surround me, another canadian rapper to dismantel... you'll get "tuned" to have "flashbacks" like i was changing the channel...:shoot: RB my “home” Page, plz don’t band me for this “domestic disturbance” "my offense"... I get tense to be intense that’s why this kid’s getting burned like Miss.Cleos incense... Look Princess if your verse is hot then I must be seeing it as pretense... Don’t give your rhymes “thought”; giving so much “brain” you probably got no sense... explanations: "tuned" means fixed beat up. fucked the link: was a canadian thinking he was the best one on the site y'all should get the rest i dunno if i threw a extra line in their and if i did then you can to also the way i did the verse might hurt the structure, but any way drop it |
ok.......................then.
uh.....nice verse uh.....nice verse Votes Please............................................ .................................................. ......... |
man i fucked up my verse... o well, uppinf for votes
also can y'all click that link for my other battle to be voted on thanks |
Opener: Tie
Punches: tie Personals: Canuck Vocab: Kaut Wordplay: Kaut Flow:Kaut Closer: Canuck Close battler but overall = Kautious because he had originals |
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need those poll votes uppin for votes .................................................. ................. |
Kautiouse....what u think is wordplay isn't-same with canuck on his first line......
I read thru an felt canuck's verse was very simplistic filled wit childish threats....which i guess u could categorize as punches.... Kautiouse kept quoting "things"....for what reason I dont know....but other than that it had sum decent flow and some O.K. met4's...... to me this is difficult for me to decide...... ....... .......... ..............well....Ima have to go with canuck......as simplistic as it was...it seemed to me that he was geared more torwards a battle verse.....kautiouse....u'r alot better than what u shown here....try an stay on base a lil bit more though...u got all caught up in your wordplay...... vote-canuck |
sup k man.
flow=k closer=tie opener=c enjoyment=k punches=k personals=c overall=k good spit man try include harder punches and mre wordplay........plz put an honest vote on this as i took the time thx man http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99408 .....pz |
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