had to burn one first
 

Grabbin the raw, trickin it up,
Grabbin a trick, slippin x in her cup,
Grabbin your girl, waxin her butt,
Waxin the slut, waxin thick with my nut,
Yea hoe, layin the pipe,
Pullin out, to nut her eye,
Grabbin her side, takin the ride,
Takin it stride by stide,
Bitch waitin to die, waitin for my,
Dick in her teeth,
Leavin stretch marks in her cheek,
And best believe,
Ima grab my shit and leave,
Hit the streets, hustle on beat,
Two on my waist, one by my feet,
Servin the hard, servin em scars,
Servin the cars,
pullin up, Servin me yards,
Yards to G’s, G’s to keys,
Its all for me, its awfully,
Hard to see through me

Reviewed
A.T. (2), MJ a.K.a ThaDon

It was okay. It's kind of like an easy topic though. I suggest thinking up some harder topics. Maybe get more personal about it. "Dick in her teeth/ leavin stretch marks in her cheek." This was a good line. Nice and original.

This was ok....you really should work on your structure though...like i said before make the lines a bit longer and keep them around the same length so its structured decent and so it helps out the flow...try adding some more multies and internals to your pieces though so its better...but keep at it.

wasnt feeling this......structure is fucked up....needs lengthened...and i didnt like ya scheme....too simple...need more complexity thrown in....make it more interesting......pZ....

wasnt it feeling this at alll
flow was ight.. keep spittin man