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authenticity 12-18-03 10:46 PM

for the one i love...you dont even know
 
i'm sitting right in front of you...
but you dont even know i'm here...
i stare at you for like 10 minutes....
then i feel something wet... a tear....
then i realize everyones like that...
no one knows i exist....
so i sit back with my head in my hands and think
aint life a bitch????
i want you to notice me...
maybe even a smile...
even just one hello....
would satisfy me for a while...
everyone likes you....
your the finest guy here....
but that doesnt mean you can just play with my heart...
maybe you can save me from that one little tear...

prophiit 12-20-03 05:31 AM

props....took pain and compressed it into an almost dr. seuss like format....i'm impressed...after reading this and your sig...i gotta say it....things will get better...keep writing and you will heal...take it from someone who knows..

authenticity 12-21-03 01:34 PM

yo man thx for the...i don even know what to call it but thx anyways....umm feedback i guess lol aight will i gotta bounce...u know christmas shopping...peace

FanTa ZeE 12-21-03 01:45 PM

yeah..the poem itself needed a lot of rework..it was quite simple, yet i think you got your message across perfectly..i guess this was just a quick drop eh? well i feel you and i know exactly what your talking about, i've been through that invisable scenario..it hurts so damn much..all i can tell you is keep your head up and value yourself..then you'll be noticed for all the right reasons..

as for friends stabbing you in the back..referring to your sig..i only have this advice..turn to drink..drink dos not stab you in the back..had side effects..but its sooo good! roflmmfbsrao

dont get to wrecked!

authenticity 12-21-03 09:28 PM

i seriously need to change my sig.....but yea i did turn to drink....i dont get to wrecked tho...and yea it was a quick drop...ok well i g2g...peace


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