First Thang in the mournin
 

First thang in the mournin, ive gotta burn one,
Get my mind ready, for the next thang to come,
get my 9 ready, for the next one to run,
get my behind ready, get out there to serve some,
coke dimes the size of tums, changing lanes,
flippin the grain, makin some change,
flippin everything, cuz im changin the game,
not changing the name, That'll stay with my fame,
Had to lay low when i heard the cops came,
they around my way, Undercover lookin for cane,
out in another town, showem how we get down,
showin em if they clown, surely we bust rounds,
Through they face, through they skull,
bitch ass nigga, act like y ain't know,
I've seen that nigga round my block,
and now im charged for killin cops

Fuckin UC's, fuck the Police, never hold us down, fuck ya

Just a lil early mournin sumthin

Reviewed:
MJ a.K.a ThaDon
A.T.
Dropz

nice flow, no big use of multis in my opinion and the "theme" of the rap is one thats been done one to many times, but you have skills and a good starting structure. keep it up

thanx yo

yeah the flow was there,,,but the topic was played......didnt really stand out to me...but i see where ya coming from...the first thing i would say is up ya vocab and scheme it was a bit basic....once you address this, i think you could be good....work on it...pZ

Yeah this was ok....structure was alright, it could be better though in this, try keeping your lines around the same length though....flow was alright in this...but you should try to use some more multies though to make this better...and probably up your vocab a bit as well...but keep at it.