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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
02-23-04, 04:58 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 321
Posted By
Philo
dude,
yeah nice work I guess on it.
But English...
dude, yeah nice work I guess on it. But English sonnets have 10 syllable lines and some range of in to 12. You were hovering between like 11 and 16 or 17 sometimes per line. You may not have to... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
12-12-03, 10:36 PM
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Replies: 11
Views: 327
Posted By
Philo
If i were you I'd work on getting good first...
If i were you I'd work on getting good first before i worried about being deep. i don't mean to be mean, but i've seen too many amazing things and terrible things to care about your shitty rap. so... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-28-03, 04:16 AM
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Replies: 10
Views: 252
Posted By
Philo
It had potential and part of the messge was there...
It had potential and part of the messge was there but the poem itself was too elementary to tackle the topic you were going for. I think you should work on spelling because it makes a difference... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-28-03, 01:53 AM
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Replies: 6
Views: 201
Posted By
Philo
t'was good.
I really appreciated the...
t'was good. I really appreciated the uncapitalized i's... good technical aspect there. some punctuation would've been nice but I'd like to assume it was left out for a reason. 'men' should be... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-28-03, 01:50 AM
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Replies: 12
Views: 247
Posted By
Philo
The content of what you were saying was good and...
The content of what you were saying was good and your message was understood. Good luck with you family. I would recommend working on technical aspects of poetry. First rhyme scheme... it was forced... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-23-03, 09:07 PM
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Replies: 13
Views: 232
Posted By
Philo
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-23-03, 01:57 AM
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Replies: 17
Views: 301
Posted By
Philo
My apologies to Chasin for using his thread as a...
My apologies to Chasin for using his thread as a debate thread... but seeing as how your poem inspired this overwhelming response it's probably only fitting.... plus its free up's for your piece. To... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-22-03, 11:31 PM
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Replies: 17
Views: 301
Posted By
Philo
^^thats what stupid people say... its not about...
^^thats what stupid people say... its not about being good but its definately not only about expressing ure inner emotions.. have you ever read a poem? go draw a picture. |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-22-03, 04:38 PM
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Replies: 17
Views: 301
Posted By
Philo
at least your thinking.... that's a good...
at least your thinking.... that's a good thing. .wurd. .keep up the good work. |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-21-03, 09:32 PM
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Replies: 17
Views: 301
Posted By
Philo
I thought the last stanza was too...
I thought the last stanza was too cliche. 'feelings escapes'??? ^^^other than that technically sound...obviously. The rest was good, topic universal but you took a very negative stance... even... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-19-03, 08:27 PM
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Replies: 13
Views: 232
Posted By
Philo
thankyou for the replies....
no i have not read...
thankyou for the replies.... no i have not read 'illusions' or seen 'son in law'... sorry, but if you can make the comparison, great. First to Bouncedoggy, I really liked that interpretation. It was... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-17-03, 04:15 PM
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Replies: 23
Views: 391
Posted By
Philo
simple and felt....
simply put...
simply...
simple and felt.... simply put... simply felt. well done. .peace. |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-17-03, 04:12 PM
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Replies: 13
Views: 222
Posted By
Philo
expression will become a forgotten word,
I just...
expression will become a forgotten word, I just thouht this line was lovely. The piece was good. The approach you took in order makes much sense, in that sense it's a very well done piece in terms... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-16-03, 10:38 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 157
Posted By
Philo
It kinda seems like an underdeveloped...
It kinda seems like an underdeveloped rap... needs work kid. .good.luck. |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-16-03, 10:33 PM
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Replies: 12
Views: 184
Posted By
Philo
That I think the poem was good.
I think it's a...
That I think the poem was good. I think it's a lot of energy put into pre-analyzation of a girl and I understand how high hopes can be shattering sometimes. But you seem to put much faith into... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-16-03, 07:08 PM
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Replies: 3
Views: 147
Posted By
Philo
You did a good job with this one. However I...
You did a good job with this one. However I think that the way you used 'you' and directed it towards someone else throws it off. Is there a specific group your talking to or just people in general?... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-16-03, 07:03 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 168
Posted By
Philo
The content was good...
I liked what you were...
The content was good... I liked what you were saying but you didn't say enough and you jumped through your emotions too quickly to make a proper impact. It is very difficult and seems pointless... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-16-03, 06:59 PM
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Replies: 4
Views: 118
Posted By
Philo
The content and implications that are laced...
The content and implications that are laced throughout are good ones. The stream of consciousness like narrrative worked well ... But you need to format better and proofread and edit. Your stuff... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-13-03, 10:09 PM
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Replies: 22
Views: 343
Posted By
Philo
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-13-03, 08:30 PM
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Replies: 11
Views: 187
Posted By
Philo
advice.
don't live your life for boys.
thats...
advice. don't live your life for boys. thats society... why are you writing this shit? because you live with these idealistic hopes of love and life and sex, and this is forced on you from all... |
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Forum: Textual Releases
11-13-03, 08:08 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 110
Posted By
Philo
^^^wurd.to.that.
try to say something.. and if...
^^^wurd.to.that. try to say something.. and if you don't then at least do it in a creative and impressive fashion. also... brackets explaining lines are not needed... especially in the middle of... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-13-03, 07:54 PM
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Replies: 13
Views: 232
Posted By
Philo
Graduation
I stand upon my own intellectual pedestal where I think and I write. I ponder life's questions and attempt to answer them for others. Where do we fit into time and space? How do we measure feeling... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-13-03, 07:33 PM
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Replies: 9
Views: 164
Posted By
Philo
One meaningless sorry, is all i get from all this...
One meaningless sorry, is all i get from all this grief, His emotion comes and goes, as when he pleases, I could spit on him and in the same moment hold him close, Like the gentle flower in... |
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures
11-13-03, 07:10 PM
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Replies: 22
Views: 343
Posted By
Philo
it becomes not a matter of arrogance but of...
it becomes not a matter of arrogance but of spirit. The problem is that it hurts to self analyze something that seems so raw. It hurts to self depricate physical appearance but by the same token it's... |
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Forum: Elevated Front Lines Battles
11-13-03, 06:57 PM
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Replies: 16
BATTLE: Sand vs Chrit.
Views: 893
Posted By
Philo
I haven't been on the site for too...
I haven't been on the site for too long... but... I was always under the impression that biters should explain themselves... and if the explaination is not fully legitimate... they should be banned. |
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