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Old 01-03-06, 02:22 AM   #16
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This was feedback posted for Mike Macs

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Old 01-05-06, 03:17 PM   #17
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Bitch nigga better get my name right, best know that I'm always mackin
You an e-thug, so blatent, like you 50 in a soap opera, shit you bad actin
^^Kinda feelin it,Its an iight opener and more of a jab than a punch but its iight

No point in droppin ya verses nigga, win for me will come quick
My times wasted droppin verses on lil man, like money invested in a trick
^^Not feelin it,realy no punch there

No effort needed, I just take one breath ya shits gone in like a twig in the air
Verses so lethal, went ahead gone homicidal, crime scene was ya comp chair
^^Can you say,WACK?!!?...C'mon man that right there was a disgrace to rappin,i know you can do better than that

You garbage nigga, neva be good, best peep that shit and don't get it twisted
Punches had it like ya verses was doin they own porno, as-whole fisted
^^Once again wack with a fuckin jab not a punch

Out my sight with all that bull crap, I could tell by ya name you a cracker
Ya verses a fortune tella, yessin my questions, like 'Could you get any wacker?'
^^Last line on that was good but nothin special

Tired of all these crackers, can't rap, register tryin to battle, seein it to often
All acceptin battles with me, ain't knowin steppin up I'ma put them in they coffin
^^Self-glory, no punch, wack

What mo can I say bout this nigga, this bitch a rapper, without the delight
As my verses walk all ova this nigga, watch this no show get stomped on like he in a fight
^^Wack


Lyrical beatdown bitch, only thing left for you to do is retire like hova
It's all lights out for you nigga, ya career done kid it's game ova
^^^Fuckin wack,no punch

I'm puttin ya in a state of depression, lyrics slavin you like the holocaust
Now watch this pussy read my verse, then decline the battle, knowin he lost...
^^First off you cant read someones verse till you drop...i was kinda feelin it though and i think it was an iight closer

iight man you needa elevate alot...And what tha fuck is up wit tha shit callin him a cracker and tryna diss him like that, but then in tha next line you call him a nigga?...Itz fuckin stupid...Anyway, like i said, elevate


my latest hold... is on this rap, you'll have to pay for votes
cuz we only take you "lightly", no matter which "weigh" you go
^^Feelin tha word play right there, nice opener

i'll give him hell, my lock over mike could never fail
gettin popped, or fried tha only time "macs" would ever sell
^^Once again nice wordplay...Feelin it

like Sosa, im a big hitter so you dont wanna start shit
man, you tha king of litter, cuz you always droppin garbage
^^Didnt rhyme...iight punch

this kid was neva a gangsta... ima tell you why he gay...
the only time he from tha hood is when he droppin in his PJ's
^^Once again it didnt really rhyme but it was an iight closer


Iight man you need to elevate too but not nearly as much as mike does,your word play is pretty much down you gotta work on punches and personals but dont really worry too much

Iight this is how it breaks down

Personals-None
Punches-Rapper
Wordplay-Rapper
Flow-Rapper
Structure-Rapper

I guess that pretty much says it all...And if you dont get what im tryna say, im tryna say Mike Macs, you jus got your ass whored like fuck man...ELEVATE...No hate but elevate a hell of a lot man
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Old 01-27-06, 12:41 PM   #18
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hmmm well both of these verses really lacked quality... but Mac was far more weak than rapper... and rapper was pretty weak...

Opener: Rapper
Closer: Rapper
Punches: Rapper
Personals: Tie
Creativity: Rapper
Complexity: Rapper
Enjoyment: None
Structure: Rapper

Vote: Rapper
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Old 02-01-06, 10:01 PM   #19
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Voted For: Mike Macs

mike u had way better punches and rymes also flow was nicer
good work

rapper get a new name first of all
u did have good structure thou and u didnt have enough lines
easy win for mike

vote mike
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Old 02-07-06, 05:31 PM   #20
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my latest hold... is on this rap, you'll have to pay for votes
cuz we only take you "lightly", no matter which "weigh" you go
i'll give him hell, my lock over mike could never fail
gettin popped, or fried tha only time "macs" would ever sell
like Sosa, im a big hitter so you dont wanna start shit
man, you tha king of litter, cuz you always droppin garbage
this kid was neva a gangsta... ima tell you why he gay...
the only time he from tha hood is when he droppin in his PJ's

okay flow got ur point across in a few lines,better punches,overall better structure, okay wordplay
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Bitch nigga better get my name right, best know that I'm always mackin
You an e-thug, so blatent, like you 50 in a soap opera, shit you bad actin
No point in droppin ya verses nigga, win for me will come quick
My times wasted droppin verses on lil man, like money invested in a trick
No effort needed, I just take one breath ya shits gone in like a twig in the air
Verses so lethal, went ahead gone homicidal, crime scene was ya comp chair
You garbage nigga, neva be good, best peep that shit and don't get it twisted
Punches had it like ya verses was doin they own porno, as-whole fisted
Out my sight with all that bull crap, I could tell by ya name you a cracker
Ya verses a fortune tella, yessin my questions, like 'Could you get any wacker?'
Tired of all these crackers, can't rap, register tryin to battle, seein it to often
All acceptin battles with me, ain't knowin steppin up I'ma put them in they coffin
What mo can I say bout this nigga, this bitch a rapper, without the delight
As my verses walk all ova this nigga, watch this no show get stomped on like he in a fight
Lyrical beatdown bitch, only thing left for you to do is retire like hova
It's all lights out for you nigga, ya career done kid it's game ova
I'm puttin ya in a state of depression, lyrics slavin you like the holocaust
Now watch this pussy read my verse, then decline the battle, knowin he lost...

okay verse work on personals and sturcture they were your major downfall punches was not hard could come better,cut down the lines to much to read if u got a lot keep the readers attention
score5/10


overall aight battle nuttin to spectacular both could have came much harder but rapper go it return the favor at one of the battles in my sig
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Old 02-15-06, 01:45 AM   #21
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imma give this one to rapper cause he had some nice punches and mike macs had a few whack lines
 
 


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