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IP: E32A 2156
Voted For: NaRc-UzI
Its obvious that i got wayne in a "Clutch" thats why im "Breaking his Neck" Wayne and his crew can go "Dutch" and still wouldnt be "Splitting the Check"* ^^^Ight...that first line was more like gangsta talk though. Homie ur a No Name u could beat "Pac Man" and still wouldnt have "No Game" Youll be living in Pain cuz Ill take the "Bat Man" and procced to "Bruise Wayne"** ^^the fuck you explain this for?we ain;t stupuid...played punch though You used to be a "Living Legend" now ur in the "military" but u aint a "Threat"*** Ur leader changed his name to "Sixth Sense" so he can see u after ur "Dead"**** ^^Lmao@this!!!!!DOPE!! You beatin me is like "Yao Ming" giving a "High Five" to that midgit "Gary Colman" In this battle your like an "Uncoftorable Shoe" cause im talking your "Sole Man ^^Played.........shoe/sole lines are played SOme played lines.Yao ming....shoe/sole...batman/bruise wayne....played as fuck.Flow was on point throughout the verse.Ur best line was the 6th. sense one.You didn't need to explain all those shit.Not like you were all that complex.And get rid of the " shit. ..These Guys Is SECOND-RATE Try 'n TEST-THA-GREAT? You'll Go OVER-AN-ESCAPADE, Let Me STRESS-YA-FATE Cuz Wit Skills i Know These "Cats Will Lack" Lyke OWNERS-OF-ESCALADES!!// ^^NO.......whack ..I'm PEELING-YA-SHOWS, Break Limbs So u Get No FEELING-U-HOES, We Tha ILLEST-U-KNOW? I'll 'Finger These Bitches' Just To Say Im "FEELING-THEIR-FLOW"!!// ^^^^Punch may have been something if worded better ..narc You'll Get A TASTE-OF-MAH-STRAP, Leave u Wit An ACHE-IN-YA-BACK, You 'Ballin' So Much On This Site I'ma Put Ya FACE-ON-MY-'SACK'!!// ^^^Not really a punch and sucks .. uzi I'ma Put u In A HEARSE-'N'-CASKET, When My Guns Start BURSTIN'-N-CLAPPIN', Ya HURTIN',-BASTARD i Feel Like u 'Need-Scars', Feeding Me 'Sweet-Bars' It Ain't Ya Fault Ya Mom Gave BIRTH-TO-A-FAGGOT!!// ^^^Punch may have been something if worded better ..We DIMINISH-YA-REPLIES, That's All Yall Got? We'll Leave Blood on Ya Faces So We'll REFINISH-YA-EYES, Leave Yall Speakin'.. FINISH-SAYING-BYE, Like Mortal Kombat Watch Us "FINISH-THESE-GUYS"!!// ^^^meh....may be your best bar OK.....your structure alone pisses me off.Get rid of the "//' at the end of each bar.Don't capatilize every multi...esspecially when a lot are forced.You may have had something if ya worded ya shit better.I'd say....stay away from multis because for you....it's fuckin ya verse up. Vote-Narc Hit my battle with Marv J |
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GeNeRaL
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IP: B376 58AD
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This was feedback posted for NaRc-UzI
IP: 5285 DC82
narc uzi came with alot of originality to this battle. Hi spunches seemed more effective and he used some good concepts.
Ur leader changed his name to "Sixth Sense" so he can see u after ur "Dead"**** I loved this punch..really effective. vote NaRc UzI Returnt he favour. check my battle vs Unrestricted. (woudl of voted but 100 post limit)
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battle vs Unrestricted..All votes returned. T.r.OO.P cant write 6-8 lines in 30 minutes, fag declined a battle that was set for 15 minute check and 15 minute spit....its only a battle dog. 30 minutes not enough... can YOU say pathetic |
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IP: E32A 2156
^^wat an idiot.....clicked on left feedback.....report it NArc.....
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GeNeRaL
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IP: B376 58AD
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IP: B376 58AD
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IP: 3631 0E72
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IP: B376 58AD
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IP: 3631 0E72
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Coming to Kill you All
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IP: 9D5A BF38
Voted For: NaRc-UzI
.These Guys Is SECOND-RATE Try 'n TEST-THA-GREAT? You'll Go OVER-AN-ESCAPADE, Let Me STRESS-YA-FATE Cuz Wit Skills i Know These "Cats Will Lack" Lyke OWNERS-OF-ESCALADES!!// ^^no.....2/10 ..I'm PEELING-YA-SHOWS, Break Limbs So u Get No FEELING-U-HOES, We Tha ILLEST-U-KNOW? I'll 'Finger These Bitches' Just To Say Im "FEELING-THEIR-FLOW"!!// ^^played....1/10 ..narc You'll Get A TASTE-OF-MAH-STRAP, Leave u Wit An ACHE-IN-YA-BACK, You 'Ballin' So Much On This Site I'ma Put Ya FACE-ON-MY-'SACK'!!// ^^not even a punch....0/10 .. uzi I'ma Put u In A HEARSE-'N'-CASKET, When My Guns Start BURSTIN'-N-CLAPPIN', Ya HURTIN',-BASTARD i Feel Like u 'Need-Scars', Feeding Me 'Sweet-Bars' It Ain't Ya Fault Ya Mom Gave BIRTH-TO-A-FAGGOT!!// ^^lmao...this was so stupuid...1/10 ..We DIMINISH-YA-REPLIES, That's All Yall Got? We'll Leave Blood on Ya Faces So We'll REFINISH-YA-EYES, Leave Yall Speakin'.. FINISH-SAYING-BYE, Like Mortal Kombat Watch Us "FINISH-THESE-GUYS"!!// ^^NO...2/10 OK...first things first...stop with the capital and (") to your multis.And..i suggest you stop tryna use multis as a whole.It ain't working for you.They were as forced as it can get.None of your punches hit.All were lines that were either weak or not a punch at all.Work on everything. Its obvious that i got wayne in a "Clutch" thats why im "Breaking his Neck" Wayne and his crew can go "Dutch" and still wouldnt be "Splitting the Check"* ^^OK...set-up bad...3/10 Homie ur a No Name u could beat "Pac Man" and still wouldnt have "No Game" Youll be living in Pain cuz Ill take the "Bat Man" and procced to "Bruise Wayne"** ^^Good wordplay/personal....8/10 You used to be a "Living Legend" now ur in the "military" but u aint a "Threat"*** Ur leader changed his name to "Sixth Sense" so he can see u after ur "Dead"**** ^^DOPE.....8/10 You beatin me is like "Yao Ming" giving a "High Five" to that midgit "Gary Colman" In this battle your like an "Uncoftorable Shoe" cause im talking your "Sole Man ^^hmm..Ok...5/10 Ok...the middle bars got this for you easy.One thing tho...work on your set-ups.And don't use the (").DIdn't really need to explain shit either.Flow stayed on point through the whole verse.Structure was good.Personals hit. Vote-Narc-UZi RTF BELOW http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203538 |
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This was feedback posted for Wayne
IP: 0825 899A
y0 tHaT sHiT wUz FiRe SuN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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GeNeRaL
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IP: 05EA A558
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