Voted For: DV8

DV8

Im a sickness n im 'anner-ex-in' him da way theres no 'phat-in-him',
Im 'trash-in-him' kid could’nt be hard if he was made from 'plat-in-um',
->>I dont see why you spelled out anner ex in him...it didnt have another meaning but i got what you were saying and it was tight

Its hilarious, ya”paragraphs”got peeps here n after echo’n with laughter,
Not cause they hot, but cause ya worse than rapverse’s greatest disaster,
->>good concept but you didnt close it good

you can’nat-zee’my level cause you da flip side of a ‘tac-tic’lyricist
Its sudden n ’swift’ da way I ‘konive’ dis ‘bizarre’ ghetto ‘kon-artist’
->>I dont understand this at all...I know theyre D12 but why did you put this in here

Lookin for a single win, this kid sets battles up quicker than he can type,
In hope of finding someone that’s wacker than him on text or a mic
->>word...flow off but pretty cool

If you get 1 vote I’ll be surprised dat da voters lied,obviously acting homo,
Cuz in diss battle your more misplaced than commercial breaks in pornos,
->>wack

This kids style too bad ta call shit,I gotta make up words like”doo-doo”
I mean who freestyles words that don’t ryme?well phatinum do..lol..
->>this bar wasnt good

“PH” is off n fallin but he still ain’t sick, so kid hurry up n except this loss,
and be sure in da future ta DV8 from my path nomatter what da cost,
->>decent



phatinum

you got silicon poppin out ya clevage double ds
this freestyles screamin pls ill make my lyrics make ya explode
->>weak opener

your skin erodes till ya turn inside out you a fckin mutant
tenage turtle and spliter like you just got your first pubic
->>second line doesnt make any sense

yo o no i got six sights like a fly im a lethal kid wonderin y u fuckin ya dad all day and night owell its time you choked
throw the towel in ring da bell this guy just fckin fell ill take my lyrics to the depths of hell and still b born bring the beef
->>stretched as fuck and nothing special

cause you a new born baby who cant spit you still growing teeth you a mix beetween a boy and girl call ya self da nigga frm street wonder im a lightnin
strike i strike faster then light im leaving this battle while im still holding the light
->>weak ass closer

phatinum you really gotta focus on writing punches in bar form rather than just rambling on and on with rhyming words. first bar setup second bar punch is a good way to go. your drops are boring the way youre doing them now. go read the tutorials theyre a lot of help.

DV8 took this pretty easy...your verse fell off at the end but it was still enough to win. The beginning of your verse was pretty good though.

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