Wow this is pretty old lol..but you need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.

But this was alright i thought...your structure in this seemed pretty good i thought, could be touched up a bit though....your vocab was alright i thought...flow in this was alright, it stayed on through out the whole verse mostly, kinda fell off at points for me though....but overall this was alright. keep at it.