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Sphere, you had average content, and an average flow, but for some reason certain lines of yours struck me as real powerful ..
Fuck strife it brings isolation….the hinge of the end
On the brink of suffication with no help from a friend
^ that was one of the coolest lines in the entire piece. i felt a lot of emotion, and it was a mildly dope read. more originality in your topic might have made it really good.
edicius.
yours really wasn't that good. it seemed rushed, and you lacked in overall emotion because you forced a lot of lines to save the flow which wasn't even that extraordinary in the first place. but ehh, it wasn't too bad, or too good, pretty average. keep writing though. peace
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