Thread: heaven and a ghost
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Old 12-22-03, 10:10 AM   #2
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You need 3 links or names that you replied to or this will be closed by the mods.

Anyways, this was a good piece, you had a good way of showing emotion and some nice lines i think you need to work on some complexity and more elated creativity. Good poem for a start, but I think you could add more into this to make it more acedemic.

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