Honestly, you need to up the ante...

your punches aren't hitting, and there scattered... your flow is off, and somethings are unclear and don't make sense... for instance:

but heres something thats extremly free, my white female ass stupid.....go back to a. b. c

if ive gotta rap then ive gotta smack.....ya momma for letting u come back after you had dat asthma attack.

these bars don't transition well nor make a heck of alot of sense. this particular style of battle you're using, where it may not be a continuous verse, typically follows a topic such as why your opponent sucks so bad or boasting about yourself.. in your verse using this style, you're too sporadic. your forcing your rhymes, which in the end hurts you...

i'm not saying your bad or anything, just thought i'd toss in my two cents on how you can deliver your verse better. Keep at it and you'll be chill...

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