so dead its scary

It starts out very nicely written, with good structure and a powerful point to help get your message across. But the further you read into it, the more and more emotion spills into the piece. You used good vocab in this. kept it simple, with your message plainly laid out, made it a strong piece. you showed your thoughts and emotions well with lots of detail, and gave examples that almost anyone can relate to. it was a very nice read.

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~Tera~
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