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Old 12-23-03, 04:57 PM   #15
Feeble Minded
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executive. . you tried to make your verse too chock fulla multies. that made it more boring, cuz the multies didnt need to be there.. they were just. . THERE. and. . your punches didnt really hit well. . you tried to say shit like subtract you record bla blah blah. . well, if the reader has to go and actually do shit like that to figure out the verse, then its not a verse, it is a crossword puzzle. .

fue-xion - nice verse. you've really elevated since the last time ve seen you spit. . you definitely won this with no trouble, and have made it into elite.