to be honest i didnt like it at all..it just seemed simple. it didnt seem like the emotion flowed good either, it seemed forced. i could see sum talent but theres sumtin blocking it. try again, thas all i can say.

rhymes-4
similes-3
emotion-4
message-6
metas-0
overall-17/50
final comment- its not that u have not talent, i dont mean to sound like im dissin u. im just being honest, i can see that u will get better, just keep tryin man. keep ya head up.

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