hmmmm...well at 13, that is pretty good to be spittin and I like th use of multies in your verse, makes it flow really nice.

What I suggest tho, first is to seperate the different lines when posting plz. 2nd, It would really help if you like checked over ur lines, just proofread them and touch em up so they sound better, u hear what Im saying? like instead of a freestyle, make it sound more like a track.

Overall, decent verse, just work on the things I mentioned and i should b better.