this was a good drop, with lots of detail and emotion. your intro was good, for if it wasnt i wouldnt have read it all the way throu. structure like mentioned could be pushed up to the next level on your next piece. the rhyme scheme was basic and simple, and sometimes i found it to be a bit much. your message is a serious one and you kept its importance and didnt drag it out. and your outro was good, i liked it the best out of the piece. nice read.

~Tera~
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