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Old 12-25-03, 10:51 PM   #9
Mr.Christensen
Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
 
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aight, here my part

the flow to this was nicley done, the rhyme scheme you used was done very well. reading this picece was not too had and relating to it was also easy. Now the bad part...some of your rhymes were basic...and i mean BASIC... the hook was a nice idea, but hero 2 times in 2 lines was not a good idea...

about once or twic you used the same word to rhyme with itself...come on man...your better than this

good drop none the less, and if that bitch keep getting on your nerves, bring her to my house
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