that was a nice piece..but honestly a little too simple ...it could use some work on structure vocab and adding some poetic forms wouldnt be too bad either it was nice and creative the way u did they ask when it was really you but..maybe u should reconsider it and post it up again...im willin to help any way i can but ima a newbie too... holla...

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