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Originally posted by Straight Ace
It's a pretty busic, often written bout subject.
The catagories ppl use to define the overall appeal of a piece..
Metaphores, Vocabulairy etc..
If one would judge your piece solely on that..
Chances are big u'd get a C+ at best.
Im not tryin to put your down just read what i said above..
U'll understand.
But as you dig deeper into a piece u always stumble upon a message.
Yours was obvious..didnt require alot of diggin' but still attracted -- Me to read on..
A emotional piece is always hard..so sometimes the formulation of ur words may seem 'childish' but your effort shows.
Keep writin, increase your vocabulairy n try to put more effort,
Into ur imagery and 'role play'.
Good Luck.
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WHAT THIS KID SAID... it was a good drop... but its like this... try to find concepts that you wouldn't Normally see or notice newhere... thats the point of writtin in the first place... undastand where you comin from on the piece... but be more... ORIGINAL...
Caesar - On3
PEANUT HEAD ... YOUR GONNA GET BANNED YOU IDIOT