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reign man

me and wins attract each other like glocks-and-magnets//
while losses cling to this kid by the name of rocco-malice//
nice

i leave ya bones shattered and scattered in a box-of-fragments//
out of all the contestants, how come i got-the-faggot??//
[]b nice concept jus didnt work[/b]

dam! what a way to start-this-is-ill//
u could be a illustrator, and still have no artistic-skill//
same as above, could of been made better

u buggin if u think u gonna win, u-is-loco//
u only got to into rap battles due-to-no-shows in other
websites//
didnt ryhme, wack punch

i got exec's scoutin-my-name, but for u im doubtin-the-fame//
ur not on my level son, u might as well just get outta-the-game//
aiight, not too bad

im up against a scrony-dude, that was born-to-lose//
but ima take his lyrics, and after i beat him, TextBooks guna run the show//
again didnt ryhme, last line had a good concept

i just stopped-in and i mocked-him//
u shoulda not even spit, and got beat the same way u got-in//
pretty creative, if you meant wat i see in the second line

the way i come so hard, yall say im so-erect//
i'll go-wit-techs, and blow-ya-chest//
not a good punch

u spit rhymes but to no-effect//
i got morals, but even if u was my elder i wouldnt show-respect!//
wack

Joker
this kid couldn't drop hot shit if he stocked stoves on his ass/
i just got to laugh... your so easily ripped like tearing wet paper in half/
played a lil, but an aiight opener

Rip out your tongue, teeth and gums to show my verbal-presence/
Laugh-at-ya words and defeat you cos this kids a herb-in-essence/
nice

Smash ya vocal chords on the pavement just to curb-your-cadence/
i put this as the odd line, nice

Mentally throw scalpels at ya head worse then disturbed-patients/
Call this Family Matters the way I hurt ya like perturbed-relations/
nice multi, nice punch

Cut off ya pinky toe section, connect it to ya dick to prove ya length with erections/
Injure ya arm & veins with infections, piss on ya needle when ya make lethal injections/
creative. multies, seems forced

i diss to extremes, all ya spits are dirty like when nile meets the
gulf stream/
ya livin a dream, ya couldn't 'spit clean' by washin ya mouth out with Listerine/
not too bad

reign
fix your structure, an stop usin bars that dont ryhme, you need to hit harder with you punches.

joker
structure needs a lil work, your wordplay needs to be a bit better, an jus keep it up.

overall joker