Well I'm new... but if you check my posts... I always keep it real.

The piece had a good concept and a nice energy. But, I have to say that I am happy to hear that it's not your final draft. I say this because there are alot of mispellings in it... which I feel take away from the piece. An Open Mic as I understand is not a timed spit like a battle. And it's not a quick reply / post that you just typed real quick. Even though you should make sure you are spelling things right always... it's most important in an Open Mic in my opinion, when you are not under pressure to "get it out".

Words like:
Hear = Here
Untoled = Untold
Stear = Steer
disaray= disarray

But all in all keep elevating Man... I could've just commented on the content, which was cool, but that's not how I do.