Tolerant Level
I dissed, pointed out your stretched structure..
Take a hint..
Content wise your verse wasn't half bad..
You got the vocabulairy & multie's..
But you lack a certain battle mentality..
Seein' as your verse did not contain any solid punches & or..
Personals..in contradiction to DNF..who did.
Also..dont do the ~ thing it quite useless.

DNF
Clean structure..some mediocre..near weak lines..
But, you did have more personals..that was good.
Overall i saw no flaws..except for the flaws you already..
Know about, add more complexity etc to ur verses..
Also..dont explain everything, we get it.

vote:DNF


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