wow alot of twists in this piece! keeps changing directions, which kept me interested. its a sad topic, him loving to hurt her, but its a real topic, and you brought it here strong and in good light. The message and feeling to this piece was great! real strong with good detail. The intro was pretty good, it made me think thou that this was another lovey dovey poem, which it was far from. and your outro was dead on, i loved how it ended, thou it was sad. i like this piece alot! i'll be looking for more!

~Tera~
DONT HATE

can you check out my piece, Cold Hate, sometime.

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