FreeYayo
Your structure was basic..good.
But content wise you just lacked..
The witty,funny or personal punches,
Did not occur in your verse..
Basically quite weak to be honest..
I mean your not that bad.. just work on,
Punches & that witty wordplay which are,
Essential in battles.
Overall Below average..

Mr W.Rite
Pretty basic..try not to fill space up with the..
Dots so much though..
You had some nice lines..good personals..
& sum funny, witty lines that summat where..
Quite enjoyable to read, a rare thing in FL.
The mistletoe line made me laugh a little.
This is a battle, punches are what count most..
You had way better punches & personals..
So..do the math.
Overall Ok-Good.

vote Mr W.Rite