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Old 12-29-03, 07:28 PM   #5
Meters
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This was alright i suppose, very emotional i guess. Keep elevating, vocab could have made this stronger, less obvious rhyme choices. Fix up your structure, make it a bit more complicated. Good luck to you.
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