Thanks for your opinions. I'm not trying to please people here, I wrote this on my own with only myself as a critic in mind. Some words are much more vivid and communicate in one word what might take five so it helps my structure. I realize it might alienate a few readers but none of the words i used are *really* that difficult.

If you don't understand meaning of certain parts, ask me.

Really, thanks though everyone. Upping.

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tobacco pipe smoker
escobar, your life is over
justify the righteous nova
bullets flew out his right shoulder