that was some dope shit.
why no replies? no idea,
great story, but what lacked?
the rhyming was alright, but. .
rhyming isnt all that matters.
your vocab was average.
myself, i dont like average vocab
i like good strong to back up a point.
but thats alright. what was good ?
the stroy flowed well, was very funny. .
nice ending, lots of surprise twists.
this was one of the most creative pieces ive seen in awhile
nice work, if it was even yours. -feeble.