I, for one, really liked this. You have your structure down really well and there were some vivid images here as well. This was really to the point, nothing was unneccessary which is something i can appreciate because i have difficulty doing that in my own verses. I really liked the 13th parralel part but overall i think this goes together best as a piece, not one standout line. Good work man, keep writing!

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