you had a nice rhyme scheme here, was basic but effective...you amde good sue of your knowledge of vocab to make the rhymes more meaningful n' complex...
"reproachful looks from generals, coaching nations
men on the 13th parallel, having vivid negotiations
intimidations, when they leave they better zoom. .
N. Koreans brought metal guns in a sweaty room. . " - thought that was tight, fitted in with what is aid above...
NIce concept, original. North Korea has always been a mysterious place to me, glad someone picked up a pen n' wrote about it, you played it well adding nice imagination n' imagry into it...
3/5 - would give it a 4 but i felt that it was too short, needed another verse or so to add mroe depth to it...nice nonetheless.
can you return the favour...?
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