your intro to this piece, was pretty well done, but the second paragraph was what drew me in. You picked a sometimes complex message and made it pretty simple. easy to understand how you look at it. It was short, but i felt if you madeit any longer it would just be dragging it out, and making it farily boring. not all pieces have to be long. your structure worked for this piece, because it too was pretty simple. your outro i felt was good, i didnt feel like i needed more.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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