I'm a give this to DW...

Along with some advice.

Always keep your format like this, it works.

I've seen you come stretched as hell before, this is better.

Goofy went on a stretched line marathon.

I should smack you for making me read so much!

What ya threw wasn't bad, some of the wordplay was actually pretty inventive...

But a good deal of it was played and contained so, so, so much filler...

It was hard to seperate the good shit from the whack shit.

Better up your format...
Your flow will improve greatly.

Over all, DW wins with the better format, naturally...
He didn't use alot of wordplay, just added it nicely here and there.

Very even, well balanced verse.
Topped off with some nice, not great, but real effective punches.

DW

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