the beginnin was iight but the ending I could see you were losing the momentum you had near the top. Also, note that you started slowing drifting off topic...it sounded like a self-glorification piece...then you talk about being unwanted and such. Remember to say on topic. It flowed good...dat was a very good point on your verse...easy to follow...no troubles reading it. Perhaps better vocabulary would also make it better. Overall...decent drop...good job...and keep elevating.