hehe feebs...well your verse did do what I think it was supposed to do...I did capture the image you were trying to establish in my head...but I guess being young, and canadian...I do not fully understand what you are talking about which made it kind of hard for me to really feel what you were saying. overall...I like it, rap with a touch of poetry...to me, thats a great combo, it adds to the flow and gives your verse more meaning...espically when your trying to create an image as you were here.

Good verse.