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Old 12-31-03, 07:28 AM   #4
Amarant
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all i can say about this is dat it rhymed.

vocab could be improved as could ur wordplay. try to add multi to get a better rhyme scheme goin and similes, and try to grab the readers attention.

jus listen to wat every says about this and improve on wat u left out and u'll be good with time
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