to give my honest opinion i didnt like it that much because the rhyme scheme was too sketchy. I like the message because i can relate to it but i am also dissapointed that u didnt portray it in a better way, by better i mean more heartfelt way. well it was your poem not mine so its hard for me to rate it but im just giving my opinion. i liked the spanish in the poem couse it adds sumtin to it, like i feel good couse i can relate to the poem more. so overall make the rhyme scheme better, more imagery would be nice, and more emotion. out of ten id give your poem a 7. keep ya head up, its hard to make a poem thats great but its always great to make a poem.

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