was o.k...you need to make your rhymes more complex and with more depth...expadn your vocab and try to rhyme words rather than just using the obvious rhyme, you know, think about what it is you want to say before you start to rhyme it all....

Structure was aight, flow was decent...add more internals though...but it was alrite...keep it up.

can you return the favour..?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102671