View Single Post
Old 01-02-04, 01:19 PM   #5
SmokaJoka.
InSaNe KiLlAh
 
SmokaJoka.'s Avatar
 
Posts: 1,402
From: E-Dub
IP:

ur both in one of my crews...lol....so i'll vote....Bio ur first two lines were the best....the rest just flowed off and u went into that paragraph type structure....try using more up to date wordplay and punches.....personals are also nice to use....the pic line was a good personal.....but ur follow up wasn't that hard...and try ending each line with a rhyme....like u did in ur first two lines.....Spit had a harder hitting verse....and a few good personals....no hate to either of u though....here's a breakdown

BREAKDOWN
Multis - Spit
Metas - Tie
Wordplay - Tie
Punches - Spit
Flow - Spit
Structure - Spit
Personals - Tie
RhymeScheme - Spit
Overall - if Bio focuses on fixing his structure and throwing harder punches/personals with updated wordplay this would've been a much closer battle.....but Spit takes it mostly just for having harder punches....no hate to either of u though.....good read...just a vote

peace
__________________
Send a message via AIM to SmokaJoka. Send a message via MSN to SmokaJoka. Send a message via Yahoo to SmokaJoka.