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01-02-04, 02:44 PM
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LM
Drop Of Genius
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From: The promised land
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This was a good piece.
You flowed pretty well for most of it and your vocab was a plus point of this.
But to improve.....sort out the structure, that dragged you down
Overall 7/10
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