Ok breakdown..

GaZeeBo

You had good flow and ok structure...

you had some ok punches like..."This is the french revolution, ur marie antionette i'm the guillotine/
Choppin heads off lacerations more grizzly than that memphis team"

First line was unique as well as second...However it wasn't a hard punch....work on Hard punches that's what wins battles...good effort though...

Lil Phresh

"yah over, its obvious yah already "Used Up Yah Chants"(chance) like |Washed Up Cheerleaders|!! //"

That line there definitly caught my eyes as a reader...You had some other good word schemes as well....I would give the edge to you..however your structure..kinda messed up your flow scheme...which made some of your punches weak....


Good battle by both there is potential in both..better then some battle IV'e seen...

Vote goes to GaZeeBo..