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Old 01-02-04, 04:10 PM   #12
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Nephew J

Aight, here's my ten lines, wish I had more but that's fine whore//
Just hear tha lyrics I implore, hardcore throwin you on tha floor//
I'm lyrical-insane causin' you lyrical-pain, shit I'ma kill and thats real//
You see me creepin RHYTHM 2-1-2, see you blew up as I errupt//
Your rythym is goin korupt, you shoulda ducked out, you bout nothin//
I'm comin and I'm showin you somethin, you fake and these lyrics I make//
What's it take to shake you off, I bust a smirnoff bottle on yo dome//
Decapitate you, put you head on a chrome platter, give it to yo dad//
Shit, hes mad, fuck it, I'll kill all you kinfolk when I burst like tha Incredible Hulk//
You all gone, so bitch on you I piss and aint nobody goin to miss ya//

Punches didn't seem to hit hard
Good structure.. could use a lil work
Flow was goin good...someparts sucked ass tho
Wordplay....ya need it
Personals....get more
Elevate some....
Overall........12/20




RHYTHM 212

half ya shit didnt even rhyme..not a punch was thrown
simple rhyme scheme like tryin to rhyme dad wit dome
i could kill ya wit too lines, just another dumb fuck kid
surround ya wit bullet proof glass, u would still get hit
"May all the real thugz RIP", nah you aint real, u wack
cant kill me,im ya uncle...u dead nephew for talin back
tryin to kick box wit god.......
....you a star? well my rhymes is leavin you sunned
Try ya style: not-rhyming-words, u wack bitch//
...For that ya life is Done

Punches were decently hard
Wordplay wasn't that great
Personals...not many
Flow...good..
Creativity....straight...
Overall....14/20


I thought RHYTHM took this simply because
His punches hit harder
And it all flowed well....

Vote-RHYTHM 212
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