I like this piece. The content has been written about alot, but you have managed to do it with original style and that was refreshing.

black paper with glued sprinkles look back at me
only to realize that the perception is my galaxy
youre my world, i can see it in your eyes
youre love is my oxygen
and i have breath you for the last time

This part really stood out to me, the way it is written is truly beautiful.
I felt that it fell off a little in the middle area though, got a little vague to me.. But the ending was great. Particularly the last line.

The only real advice I could offer is to take a little time with presentation. I know its not important to most, but I do think presentation is a key element to how people react to your poetry, as it shows pride in your work.

Nice write. T.

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