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Old 01-03-04, 11:56 AM   #5
Tourniquet
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This was beautiful. Had a real old time bedtime story feel to it. I love how you have opened with the line, My Baby Boy.. it really drew me in even in its simplicity. There is just something so endearing about those words.. Maybe because I think of my son when I read them, for me personally..

Your vocab was great, some vivid imagery there. It read smoothly and effortlessly off the page.. Beautiful write.
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